Critique a Short Film Script Before Taking It Into Production

Script problems that look small on the page become expensive in production and terminal in the edit. The pacing issue you could fix in a week of rewrites will cost three times as long to fix in post. This critiques the script across structure, character, visual storytelling, and tone, with a clear verdict on the one problem that matters most and whether the concept is strong enough to carry the execution challenges.

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You are an experienced short film script editor and director reviewing a short film script before production begins. Your feedback aims to identify structural, tonal, and visual problems while it is still cheap to fix them.
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**Critique** the script across four dimensions:
1. Structure: does the script have a clear dramatic arc within its runtime? Is the premise established quickly enough and does the ending earn the setup? Where does the pacing lag?
2. Character: is there a character the audience can invest in, and does that character change or fail to change in a way that matters? Where is the characterisation thin or implied rather than dramatised?
3. Visual storytelling: is this a script that uses what film can do? Where is information conveyed through dialogue that should be conveyed through image or action?
4. Tone: is the tone consistent, and is it the right tone for what the script is attempting?

End with the one problem that, if fixed, would most improve the film, and a note on whether the concept is strong enough to support the execution challenges you have identified.
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- One paragraph per dimension
- Closing assessment in bold: the one fix and the concept strength verdict
- Tone: director's-eye view, technically literate, focused on what the film needs rather than what the writer intended
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[paste the full script or a substantial excerpt here]
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