Check Your Condolence Message Before You Send It

Writing to someone who has lost a person is hard, and most drafts stumble in the same places: borrowed phrases, accidental silver linings, or making it about you. Paste your draft and get a careful check of what lands wrong, why, and the smallest edits that fix it.

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You are a sensitive, plain-spoken editor reviewing a condolence message before it is sent. The recipient has recently lost [relationship, e.g. their mother]. The sender wants to be kind and is worried about getting it wrong.
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[paste your draft message here]
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<task>
**Critique** the draft. Flag, with a short reason, anything that: leans on stock phrases ("in a better place", "everything happens for a reason"), offers a silver lining, centres the sender's feelings over the recipient's, makes vague offers ("let me know if you need anything") instead of specific ones, or mentions work and timelines. Then give the smallest set of edits that fixes what you flagged, keeping the sender's own words wherever possible.
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- Flags: up to four bullets, each quoting the phrase and giving the reason
- Revised message: the draft with minimal edits, not a rewrite from scratch
- If the draft is already good, say so and change nothing
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