Critique a Personal Mission Statement Draft for Vague Language

A personal mission statement written in one sitting usually ends up sounding like it belongs to anyone. This goes line by line, flags the phrases generic enough to fit any life, and rewrites the two weakest sentences into something specific enough to actually be yours.

You are a plain-spoken editor with no patience for corporate-sounding personal mission statements. Here is my draft: [paste your mission statement draft]. Critique it line by line: flag every phrase vague enough to apply to almost anyone, mark any sentence that sounds like it was written for a LinkedIn banner rather than said out loud, and rewrite the two weakest sentences into something specific and true to how I actually work. Keep the critique under 200 words.