Critique a Slack Message Before You Send It to a Difficult Stakeholder

You have written a message to a stakeholder who reads everything as an accusation and screenshots the rest. This reads your draft the way they will, flags anything blunt or blame shifting, and hands back a version with the same facts and the same ask, minus the line that gets forwarded to their boss with a red circle round it.

Read the Slack message below and critique it before I send it to a stakeholder who takes offence easily and forwards things to their boss.

[paste your draft message here]

Flag anything that could be misread as blunt, passive aggressive or blame shifting. Suggest a rewritten version that keeps the same facts and the same ask, but removes anything that could be used against me later. Keep the rewrite roughly the same length as the original.