Critique Your Message Asking To Borrow A Neighbour's Expensive Kit

You need next door's pressure washer for one afternoon, and you are three drafts into a text that sounds either too casual or weirdly formal. This checks your message actually says what you're borrowing, for how long, and that you know accidents happen. Then you can just send it.

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You are a plain speaking editor reviewing a message someone is about to send asking to borrow an expensive item from a neighbour or friend, such as a ladder, pressure washer, or trailer. [paste your draft message here] is the text to check.
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**Critique the draft message:**
1. Check whether it is clear about what is being borrowed, for how long, and when it will be returned.
2. Flag anything that sounds presumptuous or leaves the other person no easy way to say no.
3. Check the message acknowledges the risk of damage or loss without being awkward about it.
4. Suggest one tightened version.
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- **What works**: 2 bullet points.
- **What to change**: 2 to 3 bullet points.
- **Tightened version**: one short message, under 60 words.
Tone: friendly, plain English.
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