Critique My Poem's Sonic Architecture

Your poem might read well and still sound like gravel. This critiques the sound alone: the consonance and assonance patterns, whether hard and soft sounds pull their weight, and whether the rhythm holds or stumbles. Meaning only comes up where sound helps or wrecks it. Paste the poem in, get a focused ear-level read. For poets revising, and anyone who suspects their lines clunk.

Critique the sonic architecture of the following poem: {POEM_TEXT}. Focus exclusively on sound: do not comment on theme, meaning, or imagery except where sound directly serves or undermines them. Assess: (1) consonance and assonance patterns and whether they create cohesion or feel random; (2) the use of hard versus soft sounds and what emotional register they produce; (3) rhythm and whether the poem's stress patterns feel intentional or accidental; (4) end sounds: if rhyme is used, assess its effect; if no rhyme, assess whether line endings feel satisfying; (5) pacing: do the sounds speed the reader up or slow them down at the right moments? Be specific. Quote lines. Identify the two strongest sonic moments and the one place where sound works against the poem's apparent intention.