Compare Two Lyric Drafts: Which Serves the Song Better?

You wrote the verse twice and now both feel right, which means neither is decided. This compares the two drafts on memorability, fit with the song's theme and emotional impact, then names the stronger one with reasons. For songwriters caught between two versions of the same section who need an outside read to break the tie.

You are a professional A&R consultant and lyric editor. I have written two versions of the same song section and I cannot decide which serves the song better. Compare them rigorously.

Section type (verse/chorus/bridge): {SECTION_TYPE}
Draft A: {DRAFT_A}
Draft B: {DRAFT_B}
Song's overall theme and intended emotional impact: {SONG_CONTEXT}

Evaluate both drafts across five dimensions:
1. Memorability: which is easier to hold in the mind?
2. Originality: which avoids cliché more effectively?
3. Emotional specificity: which shows rather than tells?
4. Singability: which has more natural phrasing for a vocalist?
5. Structural fit: which sets up or pays off the surrounding sections better?

Score each dimension 1 to 5, give a total, declare a winner, and provide one targeted suggestion to strengthen the winning draft further.