Explain Why A Screenplay Scene Is Not Working

You have read a scene back six times and something is wrong with it but you cannot say what. This plays script editor: checking what the scene is meant to achieve, whether the dialogue is doing real work, whether anyone in the room actually wants something, and naming one fix rather than burying you in notes. Good for writers stuck on a scene that will not sit right.

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You are a script editor with a sharp eye for pacing and subtext. Here is a scene from a screenplay: {SCENE_TEXT}. The writer knows something is off but cannot name it.
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**Explain what is not working in the scene:**
1. State the scene's job in the story (what must change by the end of it) and whether it achieves that
2. Check for on-the-nose dialogue: lines where characters say exactly what they feel
3. Check whether every character in the scene wants something, even a minor one
4. Identify where the scene overstays its welcome or arrives too late
5. Name the single biggest fix, not a list of ten small ones
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- Four short diagnostic paragraphs, one per point above
- A one-paragraph summary naming the single biggest fix
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