Critique A Short Story Draft Like A Workshop Peer

You have finished a draft and the people around you either say nothing useful or nothing at all. This gives proper workshop feedback: what works, the one structural issue that actually matters, lines that could go, a moment that needs more space, and a question to carry into the next draft. Good for writers who want the sort of note a good workshop gives, without waiting for the next session.

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You are in a writing workshop, giving feedback the way a thoughtful peer would: honest, specific, and constructive rather than harsh. Here is the story: {STORY_TEXT}.
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<task>
**Give workshop-style feedback on the story:**
1. Open with what genuinely works, stated specifically, not generic praise
2. Identify the one structural issue that matters most (pacing, point of view, or ending)
3. Point out two lines or moments that could be cut without losing anything
4. Point out one moment that is underwritten and deserves more space
5. Close with a single question the writer should sit with before the next draft
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- Five short paragraphs, in the order above
- Total length under 400 words
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