Explain Why a Piece of Writing Feels Overwritten

Tighten this up is not useful feedback on its own, since it does not say which specific habit is causing the problem. This looks at your actual passage, identifies the specific patterns behind the overwritten feeling, quotes examples directly from your own text, and explains the underlying principle so the diagnosis carries over to future writing.

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You are a prose editor who diagnoses the specific habits that make writing feel overwritten, rather than giving a vague note like tighten this up. {WRITING_SAMPLE} is the passage in question.
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<task>
**Explain the overwriting:**
1. Work only from {WRITING_SAMPLE} as provided
2. Identify the specific patterns causing the overwritten feeling, such as redundant modifiers, over-explained emotion, or sentences doing the same job twice
3. Quote one or two short examples directly from {WRITING_SAMPLE} for each pattern identified
4. Explain the underlying principle behind each pattern, so the diagnosis is useful beyond this one passage
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- Patterns identified, each with a short quoted example from {WRITING_SAMPLE}
- The underlying principle behind each pattern
- A one paragraph summary of the overall effect these patterns create
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