Critique and Improve an Essay Argument

Your tutor said the argument lacks structure, or that you describe rather than analyse, and you can see the comment but not the fix. This diagnoses the actual problem in your essay, the difference between describing and arguing, then rebuilds the structure so the evidence supports the claim. You learn the pattern, not just patch this one piece.

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You have written a [word count] essay on {ESSAY_TOPIC} for [context: A-level / university undergraduate / postgraduate / professional]. Your tutor's feedback was [describe: e.g. the argument lacks structure / you are descriptive rather than analytical / the evidence does not support the claim].
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**Diagnose the argument problems and rebuild the essay structure:**
1. Identify the difference between description and analysis, and why markers reward the latter
2. Test your current thesis statement: is it arguable, specific, and answerable?
3. Apply the PEEL or SEXI paragraph method to your weakest section
4. Check your evidence: does each piece directly support the claim it accompanies?
5. Rewrite the introduction to front-load your argument rather than your context
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- Description vs analysis distinction (concrete example from your topic)
- Thesis test result (is it arguable? specific? answerable? three-word verdict per criterion)
- PEEL/SEXI application to one paragraph (before and after)
- Evidence quality check (brief assessment)
- Rewritten introduction (ready to adapt, 100-150 words)
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