Write a Performance Review That Actually Gets Read

Your self-assessment reads like a to-do list nobody will finish: too modest, too long, all activity and no result. This rewrites it around impact, so a pay rise or promotion case stands on what changed because of you, not what you were busy with. Good for anyone facing an annual review form that needs to do real work.

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You are writing your own self-assessment or a performance review for {REVIEW_CONTEXT} (yourself, a direct report, or a peer). The review needs to [describe purpose: e.g. support a pay rise request / justify a promotion / satisfy an annual HR process]. Your draft is currently [describe: e.g. too modest / a list of activities rather than impact / too long / too vague].
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<task>
**Rewrite the review to demonstrate impact, not activity:**
1. Explain the fundamental difference between activity language and impact language, with examples
2. Apply the XYZ formula: accomplished X, as measured by Y, by doing Z
3. Rewrite your three strongest contributions in impact language
4. Address the promotion or pay case directly: what problem would be created if this person left?
5. Close with forward-looking contribution: what will be delivered in the next period?
</task>

<output_format>
- Activity vs impact examples (two-column: Activity language | Impact language)
- XYZ formula applied to your three contributions (ready to use)
- Retention argument (2-3 sentences: the organisational cost of losing this person)
- Forward-looking close (one paragraph)
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