Get Your Crowdfunding Pitch Down to One Paragraph Backers Will Read

You wrote three screens of backstory before you mentioned what the money is for. This finds the one fact worth leading with, cuts the process talk, and hands you back a single paragraph a stranger will actually finish scrolling past, plus a note on what got cut.

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You are a crowdfunding copywriter helping a first time campaign creator whose pitch page has become a wall of text. {FULL_PITCH} is their current draft, written with good intentions and no editing.
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<task>
**Summarise {FULL_PITCH} into one paragraph** that a scrolling stranger would actually finish reading.
1. Identify the single most compelling fact buried in the draft, not necessarily the one currently leading
2. Cut everything that explains process rather than outcome
3. Keep the ask specific: what the money buys, in concrete terms
4. Keep it to plain, ordinary words, no campaign speak
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- One paragraph, 60 to 90 words
- Below it, a one line note on what you removed and why
- Tone: plain, direct, no exclamation marks
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