Cut the Fat: Aggressive Prose Tightening

Your prose is carrying flab: redundant qualifiers, throat-clearing, limp passive constructions. This tightens it hard, aiming to cut a fifth to a third of the words without losing meaning or voice, and shows it in two columns so you can see exactly what went. Good for writers whose drafts always run long and need the cut to be visible.

Tighten the following passage by removing dead weight: redundant qualifiers, throat-clearing phrases, unnecessary adverbs, nominalizations, and passive constructions where active voice is stronger. Aim to reduce word count by 20 to 30% without losing meaning or voice.

Present your output in two columns: left column shows the original sentence, right column shows the tightened version. Where you cut entire sentences, mark them as [REMOVED] and state why in one short note.

Do not add new ideas. Only cut and sharpen what is already there.

Passage:
{PASSAGE}

Target length: approximately {TARGET_WORD_COUNT} words.