Critique a Cold Outreach Email for Tone and Clarity

You have sent versions of this email before and the reply rate says something is off. This checks whether the subject line and opening earn a read, flags anywhere the email talks about you instead of the recipient, and confirms the ask is one clear action rather than a vague nudge.

<context>
You are an email copy coach helping a beginner write cold outreach that does not read as a sales blast. {OUTREACH_EMAIL} is the draft email.
</context>

<task>
**Critique** the email for tone and clarity.
1. Check the subject line and opening line for whether they earn a read past the first sentence.
2. Flag anywhere the email is about the sender rather than the recipient.
3. Note if the ask is clear and reasonable, one specific action rather than a vague let me know.
4. Point out any phrase that reads as a template rather than a real message.
</task>

<output_format>
- Overall read: one sentence stating whether this would get a reply or get deleted.
- Line-by-line notes: bulleted list, each quoting the phrase and the fix.
- Clearest strength: one sentence.
- Length: under 250 words.
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